Monday, November 28, 2005
thanksgiving update

hmm...haven't done this in a while. here comes another random story. it doesn't mean anything...really. but anyways, a quick recap of my latest adventures at texas.

quick recap:
-watched every texas football game so far and realized we haven't lost any of them yet. go ut! hopefully we can win this next one and head to the rose bowl.
-sleep, piano practicing, walking around, food, work, warcraft, and the occasional movie takes up most of my time here at school.
-ran away to a far away town to visit a couple of friends. thanks for taking/kidapping me! lol. they put up with my ridiculous silliness and drunken dishwashing/teeth brushing skills. it was awesome.
-went to houston for thanksgiving break. dma took me to the biggest mall i've ever been to...the "galleria". it had this huge christmas tree and an ice skating rink inside! crazy! then ate a bunch of food at random places and hung out with a bunch of friends. many many thanks for stephen for letting me stay at his place for the holidays. the car ride was interesting on the way back. i think i talk too much. someone should tell me to shut up next time.
-i stay at the music building way too much nowadays. but the last orchestra concert is tommorow so hopefully i don't have to go as much after it.
-my plan is to download a week's worth of music. for no reason. mwaa haha.
-for thanksgiving i'm thankful for my family that have put up with my nonsense for all these years and my friends that are brave enough to help me out, even though they probably think i'm some messed up monkey. and i'm thankful for my health and good fortune...or the fact that i'm still alive. haha.

and now for the story kids.
swimming pool

amazing. that's how the weather was like. simply amazing. clear, blue sky. a small, nice breeze. the sun shining brightly. it was the perfect day to go swimming. at least it seemed like it. the boy had his favorite pair of swimming trunks on, and he also carried a big towel to dry himself when he was done. he left his goggles at home. the pool water was clean and seemed very welcoming. looking around, the boy smiled excitely and prepared to jump in. he made a few steps back, but then stopped and hesitated. he noticed that there were a lot of other people just hanging around the pool. some just sat around and stared. some walked and looked in occasionally. what were they doing? wasn't the pool open? the boy looked at the lifeguard on duty. she was a young woman in a red swimsuit. the lifegaurd noticed his glanced, smiled, and gave him the thumbs up. the boy smiled back and without a moment's hesitation he jumped into the cool water. splash! in he went.

cold. that's what the water was like. immediately the cold temperature of the water hit the boy like a million daggers, piercing every part of his body. as he sunk to the bottom, he gasped in shock, trying to get used to it. then it became increasingly difficult to breathe, so he raced to the surface to get some fresh air. after a while, when he was used to the water, he noticed how the empty pool seemed like a vast ocean. there were still people just standing around, now watching the boy swim. swim, swim, swim was all he did for a while. it was very relaxing and fun. but the people were still looking at him, and it was getting too weird. so he took in a deep breath and went under.

quiet. that's how it's like underwater. not like the surface where it was noisy and sometimes chaotic. it was relaxing, with no one to bother him. just him and the water surrounding the boy. it was nice being underwater, just really calm and peaceful. the boy opened his eyes to make sure he didn't crash into a wall and swam some more. he wondered how long he could stay here. the boy wished he could stay here forever. then it hit him.

panic. that's what hit him. for some reason he suddenly ran out of breath, his muscles felt weak. his vision became incredibly blurry. maybe he should've remembered to bring his goggles. the boy couldn't think straight anymore. he started to sink. why did he give up? he didn't know. he was scared. he was afraid. he didn't want to die alone. what a sorry, pathetic boy. maybe he should've tried harder.

strange. that's how he felt. what a weird feeling. the boy opened his eyes and stared into the sky. it seemed as if the lifeguard dragged him out of the pool. she started yelling at him and told him to leave. maybe she wanted him to be safe? maybe she wanted him to not be here? maybe she didn't want him to be swimming in her pool anymore. that's what the boy thought. the other people surrouding the pool snickered at the boy, calling him stupid, saying he couldn't possibly swim as well as they could. then they all went into the pool, and like sharks they swam around, obviously wanting the pool all to themselves.

rejected. that was what happened to the boy. rejected from this pool. some say there are many other pools in town to swim in, but the boy didn't want to even swim anymore. it was lame and he was terrible at it anyways. with a sigh he grabbed his towel and left the area. no more going underwater and escaping the chaos and drama he wanted so desperately to escape from the surface. the dripping water on his face covered the tears running down his cheeks. the boy just grabbed his towel, wiped his eyes (should've brought goggles), and continued walking around aimlessly on the surface.

Posted at 11:14 pm by

alice
November 29, 2005   05:27 PM PST
 
hrm, i think that's your most interesting story yet. it was different, pretty resfreshing, and even thought-provoking. it makes me want to know more about this goggle-less little boy, but somehow i'm still satisfied with the story. that's absolutely chawesome.
now for some critiques. while i personally think it's your most interesting story, it's not the best written. you need to revise this. there were some parts that didn't make much sense (this line especially bothered me: "then it became increasingly difficult to breathe". but he's underwater; he's not supposed to be breathing anyway! see how the wording is ambiguous?) and then there were some parts that were just lacking in substance... it needed more detail. i'm watching this kid drown but i don't really feel for him.
so there's my opinion even if you didn't ask! haha. hope it helps anyway, and keep on writing!
~aw
November 28, 2005   11:49 PM PST
 
you weirdo!!! Of course we'd take you in! Do you think we were going to wash those dishes?!?!?! haha =)
anytime anytime
~aw
 

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Name: Eric
Location: Flori-duh
Occupation: hitman/pirate
Expertise: professional forging. drawing. waterskiing with the sharks and in cold weather. gambling. ambidextrosity. acting in stupid movies. hitman stuff
Interests: piano. video games. card games. DDR. sleep. visors. glasses. anime. fire. photoshop. food. graffiti. warcraft 3. doing stupid stuff.

class and level
pianist lvl 8 / gambler lvl 2
attributes
strength: 9 (-1)
dexterity: 16 (+3)
constitution: 10 (0)
intelligence: 16 (+3)
wisdom: 11 (0)
charisma: 12 (+1)
saves
fort: 3
reflex: 4
will: 6
base attack: 6
armor class: 13
HP: 48
special abilities
inspiration: (4x day)
straight face: (+3 on all will saves)


   





 




 


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